Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.
SINCE THE DAWN OF CIVILISATION EXPERIENCES PLAYED A SIGNIFICANT ROLE IN EACH PERSON'S LIFE IN EVERY ERA OF LIFE. EVEN THOUGH PARENTS AND SOME FRIENDS'S ADVICES ARE SIGNIFICANT FOR US, WE GAIN VICTORIES BY THE HELP OF OUR EXPERIENCES. FROM MY VANTAGE POINT, I BELIEVE THAT EXPERIENCES ARE TREMENDOUSLY IMPORTANT OFR US. THE LINES WILL SHED LIGHT MY VIEW POINT.
FIRST OF ALL, PERSONAL EXPERIENCES ARE SIGNIFICANT FOR PEOPLER FOR MYRIAD REASONS. EXPERIENCES ARE THE BEST TEACHERS SINCE THEY BOOST OUR KNOWLEGE. WE NOT ONLY GET LESSONS FROM OUR EXPERIENCES WHEN WE WON BUT ALSO WE LOST. ONE CAN NOT GET THESE EXPERIENCES FROM THE MEMBER OF FAMILY OR FRIEND'S ADVICES. EVEN THOUGH THEY WANT OUR FAVOUR, IT IS NOT THE BEST WAY TO LEARNING LIFE. ADVICES ALSO SHOWS OTHER'S EXPERIENCES.
SECONDLY, EXPERIENCES ARE VITAL FOR PEOPLE, BECAUSE THEY BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BY THE HELP OF THEM, I CAN INCREASE MY ORGANISATIONAL SKILL AND BURGEON NEW ABILITIES . THESE SKILLS MIGHT WORKS TO MY ADVANTAGE IN BUSSINESS LIFE SINCE COMPANIES LOOKS FOR THE WORKER WHO SKILLED. ON THE CONTRARY, IF WE LISTEN THE OTHERS ADVICES RATHER THAN EXPERIENCED IT, WE MIGHT NOT LEARN THAT MUCH INFORMATION WHICH IS SIGNIFICANT US.
TO SUM UP, TAKING ALL AFOREMENTIONED REASONS ABOUT ONE CANNOT DENY THE IMPORTANCE OF EXPERIENCES. ONCE WE EXPERIENCED SOMETHING, WE LEARN BETTER AND BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BUT WE MIGHT NOT GET THESE CHANGE FROM OTHER'S EXPERIENCES.
- In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity 60
- Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree? It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older? 76
- People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “SINCE” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
SINCE THE DAWN OF CIVILISATION EXPERIENCES PL...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...SATIONAL SKILL AND BURGEON NEW ABILITIES . THESE SKILLS MIGHT WORKS TO MY ADVANTAG...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: To better; To well
...ONCE WE EXPERIENCED SOMETHING, WE LEARN BETTER AND BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BUT WE MIGHT NO...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1196.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 235.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08936170213 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88914699407 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582978723404 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 618.680645161 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1806341699 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.3529411765 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8235294118 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179470394816 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592283819997 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575048639338 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107982485811 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229933597396 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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