At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In come of countries, the proportion of young adult is relatively higher than the ratio of older people these days. This situation causes some positive and negative issues. In my opinion, I would say advantage of this circumstance exceed disadvantage.
People who argue that there is a disadvantage to have more younger people than elders in country usually say that young people don’t have enough wisdom from experience. Since the knowledge has been passed down from elders to young adults to avoid common mistake at work, young people did not need to experience all the mistakes such as an organizing documents and sending an accurate email to customer. Therefore, senior are practical teacher who could save a lot of time in work process to young people in society.
On the other hand, most of all, young people have responsibility to take care of members in community. All citizens other than people who work get benefit from government such as education and insurance by taxes that young people pay. so the more young people pay the tax, a burden of duty will be lighter by sharing it all together. Secondly, people could get information easier these days. Due to the development of internet, people could search a proper information as an introduction to work for the first time. As a result, they don’t need wisdom of senior as much as past time. so it is not necessary to learn from them.
In conclusion, there are more benefit to have large number of young adults compared with the number of elders.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...ue that there is a disadvantage to have more younger people than elders in country usually s...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...surance by taxes that young people pay. so the more young people pay the tax, a bu...
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Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...apos;t need wisdom of senior as much as past time. so it is not necessary to learn from t...
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Line 5, column 590, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... wisdom of senior as much as past time. so it is not necessary to learn from them....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1269.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89961389961 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64533151131 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563706563707 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2988147909 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6428571429 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169032866051 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634704581317 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688813564933 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144497741451 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089872541062 0.056905535591 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.