People are consuming more sugar nowadays and it is causing health problems.
Some people feel that the government should take responsibility, while others feel it is the responsibility of the individual.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion?
Eating too much Sugar defintely attributes to ill-health. Nowadays People are using much more of sugar which is contributing to high levels of medical problems. Some individuals are of the opinion that the government needs to take charge of the situation whereas, other opine that a person should take the responsibility of his own heath. This essay would develop arguments on both sides of the views with proper justifiactions along with my opinion.
On the one side, people who believe that government should exercise authority to curb the current menace in the society due to over-consumption of sugar. As using more sugar is the prime cause of a lethal disease known as diabetes. This chronic disease by itself comes with many complications and implications. Like, first of all it is not a recoverable disease and If diabetes is not kept under control then the affected person is at a risk to contract skin problems, losing eyesight. Blood pressure as well as heart diseases. For instance, in India the second most popular disease leading to deaths could be credited to diabetes. Before diabetes prove to engulf the entire nation’s population to the proportion of an epidemic. The government should take strict measures like taxing raw sugar and even sweetmeats with artificial sugar heavily to curb the sales and even consumption of sugar to save the economy of losing its most productive youth to this deadly disease.
On the other side, others view limiting the use of sugar can’t be addressed by the government it is an individual’s responsibility to consume sugar in moderation and even exercise, as a few lifestyle changes would prove to be highly salubrious. The government has to tackle many more major issues on the national front take for example poverty, illiteracy, pollution etc. So, we cannot expect the government to take responsibility of our personal health issues, which arises by and large due personal negligence to, health, stress management and even exercise. So for example, people who suffer from hereditary diabetes, who have come with preventive measures like cutting down on artificial sugars and following and regular exercise regime. Hence, their proactive actions have certainly proved to be instrumental to help them lead a Diabetes free long and fit life.
To conclude, I would like to come up with the opinion that controlling excess sugar consumption should be as an individual’s sole concern as it comes with individual long term health benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on and even exercise, as a few lifestyle changes would prove to be highly salubri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, so, then, well, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, as well as, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 405.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20987654321 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98135853336 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565432098765 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.41463427 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.222222222 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248506153795 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725922108949 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594298244185 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160095991249 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741683754861 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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