In some countries, children are expected to study more and more time both in and after school. Advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
Modern parents often think that your children should study all time. It’s important than your children spend their time to play or go out with their friends. Personally, I disagree with this point of view.
In the industrial age of 4.0, many kind of machines and robot are producted to sever people’s daily life. This has lost the job opportunities of thousands people in the world.Therefore, many parent make their children learn all time to improve their knowledge because they think that only knowledge helps their children have a good job and a bright future. At the school, poor student in the class will be laughed by another student and their student and their parents will be decried by their children academic results and many parents always encourage their children to spend time to learn instead of spending time to play video game,watching tv or go out to play with their friends…
But they don’t know the price to pay if they force their children spend time to learn too much. If only learning not to play sport or go out to exercise children will have health problems and they don’t have resistance. Currently, many children who learn too much are stressed and lead to neurological problems and worse can be mad. Children who learn too much don’t have many relationships with people around because they always plug in books.This is not good for them when they grow up and go out in society.
In conclusion, despite the advantages that studing in and after school can bring, it still does more harm than good.
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| 2019-03-31 | bhatvishal@ | 61 | view |
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| 2019-02-27 | minhhanhnguyen | 56 | view |
| 2019-02-27 | minhhanhnguyen | 56 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9053030303 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59210221952 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.105636885 49.4020404114 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.5 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148848430478 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069698015403 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558120620281 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117256045922 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549101147016 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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