The diagram below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
The diagrams depict how to make a chocolate bar and the percentage quota of the price of a chocolate bar.
Overall, the biggest percentage of the retail price of a chocolate bar is used to cost of ingredients and overheads. Having said this, cocoa liquor is supplying to make a chocolate bar and food industry.
Cocoa liquor and some waste product are extracted from grinding cocoa in the first process of making chocolate. Moreover, the liquor is used in two ways. The first way, when pressed into cocoa powder, it can be sold on food factories. However, when pressed into making cocoa butter, i...
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Sentence: Cocoa liquor and some waste products are a result from grinding cocoa in the first process of making chocolate.
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Sentence: The first way, when pressed into cocoa powder, it can be sold on the food industrial.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to food and industrial
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