TPO20
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
By and large it is established beyond any doubt that people's attitude toward doing certain kinds of works play a prominent role in their success. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is that whether people try new things and take risks for become successful people or they do something that they know it is cautious. I, to a great extent, concur with the idea that taking risk and try novel things helps people to be prosperous. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that taking risk helps people to gain their desire and dreams which need them to become successful. It goes without saying that when people are afraid of doing new things, they do not seek their desire and their interests; therefore, they will not be prosperous in their future life. Perhaps a more specific experience can shed more light on the matter. I always had the dream of study in a high ranked university abroad and get familiar with the novel systems of treatment. Then, I come back to my hometown and start a business in treatment of water and wastewater which is a critical concern in my hometown, but I was always afraid of loneliness and homesick in the foreign countries; so, my life was really boring and consistent. One day, I decided to take risk and apply for a university abroad. I studied in that university and now I am a successful engineer in the Environmental Engineering in my hometown and many people know me and respect me. Had I not peruse my desire, I would not have had this satisfaction in my life.
Another reason deserving some words here is that taking risk makes people knowledgeable and experienced. Knowledgeable people are more successful than others since they have more confident and power. Without any shadows of doubt, when people try new things, they get familiar with a novel area which can gain invaluable information in that subject. Repetition of trying new things and learning from them makes them knowledgeable people. They can contribute in different works and make novel ideas, other people encourage them and it boosts their self-confidence and self-respect.
Finally, yet importantly, trying new things leads to improving communication skills. Communication is one of the significant factors in people's prosperity in nowadays’ communicative world. When someone tries new things, he gets acquaintance with many people. He gradually learns how to behave with different people with various attitudes, cultures and different viewpoints. He can apply this ability in the work environment, enhances his connection and obtains his goals. For example, in today's world, many jobs need strong customer service. If a person learn how to behave with the costumers, for example in a restaurant, he can attract more people to it and make hoard of money to the restaurant. Or, when someone is angry about the quality of foods in the restaurant, he can behave well with the costumer and calm the costumer down; thus, he upgrade slowly in his career and become a successful person.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs one can soon realize that for become successful, trying new things is far better than doing the same things every day since not only can people seek their interests, but also they become knowledgeable people and it improves their communication skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, by and large, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2889.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 571.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05954465849 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86703336601 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486865148862 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 878.4 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2935619239 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.115384615 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9615384615 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299767997109 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079837993921 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081155018357 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18813080074 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762116416168 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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