The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The two pie charts above illustrate the percentages of online sales for four categories (books, clothes, film/music, and travel) in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013.

Overall, in 2003, the biggest proportion of online sales was the travel sector, whereas in 2013 it was film/music. The online sales for books and clothes varied a little.

Throughout the given period, the online sales for the travel and film/music sectors had opposite trends. In 2013, 37% of online sales were spent on travel. this figure saw a decrease of 8% by 2013. In contrast, online sales for movies and music grew from 22% to 33%.

Over the given period, people spent almost the same amount of money on books and clothes. In 2003, online sales for books was 22%, while by 2013 this number slightly declined to 16%. Similarly, in 2003 and 2013, the percentage of online sales for books changed a little, from 19% to 22%, respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
similarly, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 788.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98734177215 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39310819485 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 214.2 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7586724461 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419042961699 0.215688989381 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183963533013 0.103423049105 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096413853207 0.0843802449381 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28858550603 0.15604864568 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575779875871 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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