The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Very frequently we hear saying this or that nation is great. People define greatness according to their values and priorities. However, it is hard to disagree that the general welfare of a nation’s people better illustrates the nation’s greatness if it is based on industrious, purposeful, and organized people.
To begin, the achievements of individuals do not portray the whole picture. Those outstanding personalities simply might be anomalous for a nation. If the poverty, famine, and crime prevails among the society, no one will entitle the nation great, even if a genius is among them. People will probably venerate him all over the world. Nevertheless, the nation will remain undeveloped, insignificant. Someone may claim if a nation has considerable amount of great scientists or artists with remarkable attainments, that nation should be developed enough to produce such personalities. It is not always the case. For example, let us consider a country with a despotic ruler who has some prejudices or obsession of acquiring more and more power over the world. Such a ruler can simply invest the bulk of a budget in designing and production of weapons of mass destruction which will result in new inventions and great scientists, however the society will be impoverished. This nation would hardly be called great. Thus, if a country has ingenious people with astounding achievements but the general well-being of the society is miserable, it implies that these attainments are exceptional and do not depict the social milieu.
Moreover, the mere welfare of a nation’s people does not indicate its greatness. If the welfare is based not on nation’s efforts to develop, but just on lucky geographical position rich with oil, there is no much reason to exalt the nation. For example, the Japanese do not have crude oil reserves, they also lack plenty of other minerals. But the general welfare of Japanese people is on the high level due to the technological breakthrough in different areas, especially in automobile manufacturing. But the core reason of their achievements is the personal qualities of their people such as persistence, being committed to their job. Therefore, such nation is worth to be called great not just because of their inventions, or high standard of living, but because of the people capable to make progress and prosper. The following analogy makes this point more apparent. For example, there are two families with good health and equal amount of money. One of the family members are disciplined, very hard-working and tenacious in reaching their goals. They make money by their own efforts. And there is the second family that found hidden treasures. But its members are with no educational degree, with no any desire to reach something in life, who are existing solely on the treasure. It is evident that the first family is much more worthy of respect. Thus, it is not enough to look at people’s well-being to judge the nation.
Some people, however, argue that nation should be considered great when it is known all over the world for its achievements, i.e. the fame makes a nation great. This argument seems fine, however, it is not objective. It is true that outstanding personalities make their nation famous and maybe make people all over the world appreciate the nation. But if some people call such nation great, they do so subjectively according to their feelings and emotions. A mere fact of existence of individuals' achievements cannot logically make a whole nation great. Because, as it was mentioned above, a single person does not represent all people. For example, the achievements of the USSR in science made this country and its nation famous. Even today, the USSR supporters advocate the idea of its greatness. Many of them ignore the fact that the society was poor, the freedom was limited. To call such society great you should turn a blind eye on those facts. Summarizing, nation is a group of people, and should be analyzed as a group of people. A single person, bad he is or good, does not characterize the whole nation. Even if he/she made his/her nation famous.
Obviously, people have the right to decide which nation is great and why. However, according to my logic, the general welfare of a society, constituted by strong people determined to succeed, better indicates a greatness of this nation rather than other factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ople does not indicate its greatness. If the welfare is based not on nation'...
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...does not characterize the whole nation. Even if he/she made his/her nation famous. Obv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3692.0 2235.4752809 165% => OK
No of words: 726.0 442.535393258 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08539944904 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19079831727 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88538529878 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 215.323595506 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449035812672 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1153.8 704.065955056 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 43.0 20.2370786517 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.2752187498 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8604651163 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8837209302 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09302325581 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303884082549 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708628649029 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605059906372 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205904843051 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043133129435 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 100.480337079 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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