In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else Nowadays most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small communit

Sentence: Traditional Nomadic Life ends when the farming system had been introduced into England for about 4,500 BC.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to for and about

Sentence: However, due largely to the way people life turning into modern one, they tend to move to large cities.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to people and life

the idleness condition has raised the number of people who gain stressful year by year.
the idleness condition has raised the stresses for a number of people year by year.

Sentence: This will gain the advantages of a small village's portrayal of life which encourages more tolerance amongst people rather than who living in the big cities.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a WH-pronoun, nominative
Suggestion: Refer to than and who

Sentence: The second view also argues the downside of living in a small village is people can't take chances to study and work best and have healthy life.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

The only way some people ever tend to move to big cities as to reveal a better life.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence?

makes people more enjoyable doing their daily activity with others rather than in a big city.
makes people more enjoyable to do their daily activities with others rather than in a big city.

Error: communes Suggestion: ?

flaws:
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1801 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.073 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.732 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.268 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.455 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

Yes, you are right. I realize that there are a lot of problem for the grammatical mechanics. Thanks for the some suggestion,sir.

Dear Mr. testbig,

As suggested, I go back to my writing and revise some grammatical mechanics above. Please kindly re-read and re-mark, so I could know what grade I have for this essay is.
Thanks in advance, sir.

Respectfully yours,

- eddy.

Dear Sir,

I appreciate immensely the announcement organized by testbig administrations and the extensive effort made by all the team involved. I pass my sincerest apologies for any difficulties related to the work I had. Thank you, Sir.

Respectfully yours,
- eddy