You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter tocamp organizers and say:– Describe the areas where you can help.– Give the time period you are available.– Ask some questions about the camp.

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You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to
camp organizers and say:
– Describe the areas where you can help.
– Give the time period you are available.
– Ask some questions about the camp.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing with regard to the advertisement that is published in daily newspaper about children summer camp. I would like to announce my enthusiasm to join your camp and perform everything that is beneficial.
Initially, I really need to kick off with the point that I am an art savvy and hold particular interest to music performance, therefore I believe learning music may catch children's attention in their spare time.
Despite I have been working in an art school since two month ago, I can manage my curriculum for the last two weeks of July to participate in the camp.
Finally, I need some information about what should I carry with me, which facilities are provided for residences? Actually, I have heard about strike rules which is defined about time of wake up in the morning. Although it is not convenience for me, I respect the determined lows and will follow them. I would appreciate if you could give me more detail.
Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you need more information.

Sincerely Yours
Sam

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...been working in an art school since two month ago, I can manage my curriculum for the...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 4, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore information. Sincerely Yours Sam
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84444444444 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78711763142 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672222222222 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.658069446 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241557818646 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803526312293 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521162013154 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11249864798 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525993079776 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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