Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
There is an issue about who is accountable for children suffering from obese. Some dietitians claim that the blame is on authorities, while some social workers think that it is on parents. This essay agrees that the government should admit their fault.
Let us start with reasons why some dietitians blame the government for the excessive weight among young people. The first reason is that it commonly allows fast food restaurants to sell junk food to children. The authorities worry little about negative consequences of hamburgers on the youth, since they are obsessed with the regular payments from these restaurants in the form of tax. Another reasons is that it normally pays little attention to the health of youngsters. State officials are reluctant to promote healthy lifestyle in school, because it will require them to allocate extra funds from the limited budget. Furthermore, it usually does not stop illegal trade of junk food. Many young people can purchase unhealthy food, even though it is officially prohibited, as the police officers prefer to ignore these places.
However, some social workers argue that parents are liable for this problem. Firstly, they frequently feed their children with processed meals. For example, many mothers prefer having a lunch at the takeaway establishments to cooking dishes at home, which has little contribution to gaining weight. Secondly, they are unwilling to support their children in playing sports. Many children want to exercise in the playgrounds with their parents, which enables them to keep fit, but they mostly choose to stay at home watching their shows on television. Moreover, they set bad role models. A plenty of children adopt unhealthy habits, which lead to obesity, from their fathers as well as mothers.
In conclusion, although some social workers advocate that parents are responsible for their fat children, I think that the government should take both fast food establishments under control and organise more sports events.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: HAVE_A_BREAKFAST[1]
Message: When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: 'having lunch'.
Suggestion: having lunch
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32389937107 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63321736837 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61320754717 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2199500233 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0555555556 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17980179913 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524755375906 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600644650079 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138745018848 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792739584748 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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