Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help local community. They believe this would benefit both individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree.
Many people assume that voluntary job should be a compulsion for youngsters.
While I agree can be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole, I
believe that obligation is unequal.
On the one hand, I agree there are several reasons why unpaid job is advantageous
for both teenagers and society as a whole. The main adequacy is that teenager may
accumulate real experiences and valuable skills for their future career through
unpaid works. In addition, those accomplishments emphasize specific professional
capabilities and utilize experience summaries, which are necessary for pursuing
higher education and career promotion. Eventually, this is one way to save money
for society's budget to invest in public welfare.
On the other hand, I would argue force goes against the values of a free and fair
society. The first reason is that complying with the non-profit programs to do
unpaid works may cause resentment and misunderstanding about volunteering job.
Moreover, overwhelming pressure of studying at school requires a great deal of free
time spending on sports and relaxation. In other words, students are busy enough
with many assignments that need to be perfectly completed.
In conclusion, while compulsion certainly affects teenagers’ intention of doing
voluntary works, I do not believe that pressure outweighs all other motivators.
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: ,  
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: ,  
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1230.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 204.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.02941176471 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.75625839422 2.80592935109 134% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.691176470588 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1885724994 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.666666667 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263972360287 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937726432288 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596535713062 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06866625465 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536014782068 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.99 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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