People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Medicines are chemicals or compounds used to cure, halt, or prevent disease; ease symptoms; or help in the diagnosis of illnesses. Advances in medicines have enabled doctors to cure many diseases and save lives. Owing to this, people are living longer than ever before. Although some feel that they should spend more time now in their offices, I, however, believe if you have enough money to satisfy your needs, longer working life is not needed.
To begin with<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="To "></span>, undoubtedly, grandparents act as a role model for their grandchildren. To be more precise, they tend to enlighten<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="to "></span> them with the moral values which might help them in the long run. While I concede that caretakers can also inculcate these cognitive skills into the children, grandparents have a special bonding with them as they have blood relation. Moreover, by spending more time with their grandchildren, grandparents can minimize<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="can "></span> the chances of mishappenings to occur. Consequently, seniors are required more at home and not in the office.
Another reason why senior citizens should no longer work is that they have already done lots of work before retirement. Participating in recreational activities would make them contribute more to society. Not only does it would help them to pass their time, but also gives them satisfaction. For example, in Australia, many non-profitable organizations are generally run by the people over 70’s.
However, notwithstanding the arguments above, I do acknowledge that longer workforce is required in order to help the family financially. For instance, if the basic needs of a family are more than the remuneration of their sole earner, then aged persons must work in the office even after retirement. Therefore, to support the family, longer working life is imperative.
To recapitulate, longer workforce is required if the family is unable to fulfill their basic necessities, apart from that aged people must spend their time with their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...f the family is unable to fulfill their basic necessities, apart from that aged people must spend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, apart from, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75465838509 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.19174710574 2.80592935109 149% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8458293046 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124381029567 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051337003922 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071411735805 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955481000299 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531517475607 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.07 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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