People live longer today and so people should stay in workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
While some people believe that due to the fact that people live longer theyshould be in workforce longer; others dismiss them as they believe this a destructivetrend. Admittedly, I completely agree with the latter opinion owing to a numberof compelling reasons.To begin with, individuals cannot be ready to work during the whole periodof their life especially when they become elder. That is, when becoming older,people face with more health problems than before; therefore, they required torest more. In other words, if we force individuals to work more, we would makethem to ignore their health problems. This, in turn, would take its toll on theiroverall health and could lead to perennial problems. Yet another compelling argument against the idea of people stay longer inworkforce is the unemployment rate especially among younger generations. Havingsaid that, the less individuals retire, the more unemployment rate increaseamong young people. That is to say, if it became a standard practice thatexperienced workforce stay longer in their field, the young generations wouldsuffer as they could not simply find a vacancy to be able to be hired.Therefore, this trend will have serious repercussions especially among youngerindividuals who look for a job and could cause significant health problems and diseasessuch as but not limited to depression, and insomnia.To sum up, although people live longer today, this simple reason would notjustify that we ask people of the society to stay longer in workforce. Thus, Iam of the opinion that if we force people to stay longer in workforce, we couldface with more problems in our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40077821012 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1423552125 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599221789883 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.149799377 49.4020404114 282% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 154.222222222 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258820167378 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103010431026 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1052526804 0.0667982634062 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258820167378 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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