The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by MD Vo on Fri, 07/05/2019 - 10:40

The charts show how different were the tourism statistics over 50 years from 1960 to 2010 for two countries Australia and Germany.
Overall, both countries had massive changes on fraction of tourism for each region. Also, there were surprisingly increases in number of visitors from Asia to both countries over the period of 50 years.
It is clear that the number of European visitors to Australia was significantly dropped. In 1960, more than a half of tourists were European, while other regions like Asia, USA, and Britain kept less than a remaining half. Moving forward to 2010, European visitors to Australia were remained very little, only around 10%. Instead the majority of tourists came from Asia, which was 63%, while USA and Britain showed little changes.
Besides, similar to Australia, Asian tourists to Germany also showed remarkably increase, from 10% to 25%. European who traveled to Germany had a slightly reduction in percentage, however, they were also the majority after 50 years. In the other hand, Britain tourists fell down significantly from 20% to 6%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... remained very little, only around 10%. Instead the majority of tourists came from Asia...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 144, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('reduction') instead of another adjective.
...%. European who traveled to Germany had a slightly reduction in percentage, however, they were also ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 907.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18285714286 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57316766588 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617142857143 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.2104138425 43.030603864 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.7 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146799653135 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638780494942 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920291749246 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129600218302 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117201973823 0.0819641961636 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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