A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A teacher is not imperative for gaining knowledge. It is the thirst to learn about the unknown that drives us to learn something new. And if one is familiarized with a subject by someone else, then to have command on that subject is a daunting task. The prompt asserts that rejection of the familiar is important to achieve self-knowledge. I agree with this statement and to support it, I shall be providing a couple of examples.
Firstly, if a person is already familiar with something, then he or she might not put extra effort to get complete command over that subject. For example, while studying, a student familiar with a topic might skip it thinking that it is already known to him or her. But by skipping it, the student looses the opportunity to learn something new. If you are familiar with a subject, it does not mean that you know everything about it. Had the student rejected his familiarity with the subject, he would have gained some knowledge by himself, i.e, self-knowledge for he would have thought that the topic is new to him. Hence, it is evident by the example that by rejecting one's acquaintance with a subject, self-knowledge is, perhaps, the only way to get to know about that subject.
Moreover, familiarity with a subject gives us a false sense of confidence. We think that we already know a good deal about that subject so we need not bother ourselves with more knowledge. But if we d not know anything, we feel that we should acquaint ourselves with that subject and in that process, our interest grows, we start to learn more and at the end of the day, we amass a great deal of knowledge. Thus by giving up the knowledge that we have about a subject, we can emulate the latter feeling and the journey of self-knowledge thus begins.
Some might say that it is familiarity that kindles interest in us and drives us to learn more and more. While it is true, it is not always the case as I have tried to express in the above paragraphs. I am not refuting this claim, it is also true as is my proposition. In conclusion, I would like to say that by rejecting the familiar, we can instill in us the thirst to learn more that can only be quenched through self-knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...vident by the example that by rejecting ones acquaintance with a subject, self-knowl...
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Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ay, we amass a great deal of knowledge. Thus by giving up the knowledge that we have...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, you know, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54911838791 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75402536274 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448362720403 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4376355207 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0526315789 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0754605538076 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315055321967 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040100474745 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0477068971901 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402730279662 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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