movies or tv have more negative effect than positive effects on the young people behavior
Development of science and technology is conducive to improvement of some entertainment devices like TV that affect the youth’s life. There also have been two contrasting attitude toward this, while some believe that these devices have many positive effects on their behavior, others adhere to the idea that the negative consequences of these tools change the young people's future. To some extent, I subscribe to the former perspective. In what follows, I will elaborate on my view point.
To begin with, I believe that social programs on TV are the most expedient source for the youth learning. Various program in different channels have beneficial movies related to prosperous of famous celebrities. Furthermore, several professors, scientist or athletes are invited to speak about their life. To shed light on this matter, I will bring up an example in with I was involved. In the second year of bachelor studies in university, we have an assignment related to our psychology class that we should evaluate different programs on TV with positive effects on youth behavior. Through that research, we found that because many youths follow the behavior of famous people on social media, TV programs are convenient origin for training the youth to know the mysteries for the famous people’s success. Also they can learn positive moral characteristic of their celebrities. This example aptly illuminates how important and beneficial is to watching educational programs on TV.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that when the youths watch Movies or TV with their adults, they can spend much time together than other situations. Hectic life force people to work a lot for providing their essential needs, since they have no time to spend with their family. That conducive to weak relationship among family members and violence behavior in youths. The Asian society of preserving criminals founded that about 70 percent of criminals come from the families that their parents do not spend much time with their child to hear their problems and solve them. Therefore, watching TV plays an important role on modifying the family’s relationship for improving the youth behaviors.
In brief, contemplating on aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that by means of scientific TV or Movies youths can know more about the moral characteristic of prosperous people and follow them in their social life. All in all, it is highly recommended that families spend time with their youths by watching TV to have better relationship with them.
- people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries 65
- the opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people 71
- a person should never make an impoetand decision alone 73
- leadership comes naturally. one can not learn to be a leader 73
- are government doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of eating healthy food 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...eficial movies related to prosperous of famous celebrities. Furthermore, several professors, scien...
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Line 2, column 813, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s for the famous people's success. Also they can learn positive moral character...
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Line 4, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to have better relationship with them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28048780488 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88438842897 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536585365854 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2720977051 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.947368421 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250645606106 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658085371723 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701698872916 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151688906513 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051770639393 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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