some people believe that competitive sport should be included as a subject in the school. while others believe that it has negative effects on children. discuss both views and give your opinion
Physical activities have been increasingly becoming essential for sedentary lifestyle of nowadays. As lifestyle has changed, some believe, we should include physical exercises as a mandatory part of school curriculum to come over the issue. While other support against it. I believe keeping sports as hobby or past-time will benefit society as a whole.
Technology has changed our lives incredibly by each passing year. Invention of video games has huge impact on the way our children and youth spend their spare time by playing the game on their play-station, while sitting on a comfortable sofa within the walls of their home rather going outdoors and meeting people and in turn exposed to criticism of fellow pupils, feeling safe and confident. As a consequence, they become lonely and lack in interpersonal skills. However, physical activities boost our metabolism and increases oxygen level in body and mind, consequently, it increases memory, boost motivation level, adolescents feel more energetic, and they take risks and try new things each day. Additionally, eating habits of our youngsters has taken a turn to fast food which only comprise salt and fats and resulted in obesity in majority of kids. If they start doing physical exercises, it will balance the side effects on eating habit.
On the other hand, by incorporating sports in school, it will increase pressure on students. Some children are not as physically strong as the others and inevitably they will perform poorer, eventually they can be target of severe criticism, which will reduce their morale. Because, when you are young you are extremely vulnerable to criticism and bullying at school. Several kids just drop out of the school because of depression and anxiety caused by it. In addition to it, they start to perform low in other subjects too, as they feel inferior and lose their confidence that they could not do anything in life. Secondly, primary and secondary school already has several subjects to give pupils glimpse of knowledge of different subject. If we include sports as integral part of the curriculum, they will get over- burden and instead of increasing performance, it could decrease it.
In conclusion, I strongly think that sports should be included as extra-curricular activities, where students choose as they wish from any sport in which they have an interest. Additionally, parents can force children to do outdoor activities and fix their time in front of the play-stations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2275 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83644914462 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4000717551 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.052631579 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182614061604 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543286013839 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045601841994 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113407224427 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498732073541 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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