Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes is banned. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that advertising the overconsumption of food like smoking can have a negative impact on people's health. Thus, it will be better for the government to impose a ban on the advertising of both food items and cigarettes. While I accept that this idea may suit many people, I believe that the advertising of food products should not be prohibited.
There are several reasons why I believe that overeating might negatively affect human’s health. One reason for this is that the prohibition of some food product promotion can help address a few health problems such as obesity which is a big threat in the young generation. For instance, TV advertising gives foodies more opportunities are posted with the latest food products. This means people will tend to try new food and sometimes they will buy much more than they really need. As a result, they may get too much sugar and oil and get obesity. People who eat fast food products frequently are prone to gain weight and weaken the immune system because of the extravagant amount of fat they obtained.
On the other hand, I still believe that governments should not undertake the prohibition of advertisements for some certain food items. Advertising is an effective way that most manufacturers use to promote their products in order to approach prospective customers. If their commercials underwent a ban, their profits would decline significantly, pushing those companies on the brink of bankruptcy. This would lead to a rise in the unemployment rate. Additionally, prohibiting the advertising of certain items is an obvious disadvantage for consumers they will not be well-informed about the products they really want to purchase.
In conclusion, while overeating exerts several negative effects on human’s health conditions, the governments should not impose a ban on the advertisements of some certain food products
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...n effective way that most manufacturers use to promote their products in order to a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20983606557 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08869861331 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554098360656 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9674714577 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.933333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255837181792 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910384494954 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704863525622 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18949880963 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611396274935 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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