Integrated writing task 1 TPO 34
According to the passage, there are three hypotheses to explain the extinction of see cows: a) Native people were nourishing from see cows. Over-hunting might be the main reason of the extinction. b) Kelp, is a see weed which see cows were dependent to it as the only food source. This weed was so sensitive to the ecological disturbances and, it responds to any ecological change badly. One of the reasons could be the reduction of Kelps as the main food, which caused the extinction. c) It might be that European fur traders hunted the see cows to remove their fur. This is probable because, they had been armed by suitable weapons for hunting.
But, some objections have raised to these hypotheses and, It suggest that the main cause of the extinction is not clear. First of all, see cows were so massive and had roughly 9 meters length! One of them could suffice for a village. As it is known, the population of the native people were not so much which implies that the first hypothesis is not true.The second objection is that if the ecological disturbance had happened, other see creatures like whales would have affected too. According to the evidences, other creatures remain intact; So, the second one could not be the correct statement. As the last objection, the extinction had happened many years before the European traders arrived. It is not possible that see cows exterminated by the European traders.
As a summary, the main cause of the extinction are not clear until now and all of the possible hypotheses rejected by the lecturer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: B
...t be the main reason of the extinction. b Kelp, is a see weed which see cows were...
^
Line 1, column 485, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: C
...main food, which caused the extinction. c It might be that European fur traders h...
^
Line 2, column 62, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'suggests'?
Suggestion: suggests
...have raised to these hypotheses and, It suggest that the main cause of the extinction i...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 355, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...s that the first hypothesis is not true.The second objection is that if the ecologi...
^^^
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... extinction are not clear until now and all of the possible hypotheses rejected by the lec...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77985074627 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65573885671 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1071852731 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 7.06452816374 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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