Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Success is defined by the amount of money someone earns.
Nowadays, it is a universal thruth that virtually everybody would like to be a successful person. This is because success is associated with recognition by society, status, money, and happiness. Although many people may think that success depends on how much money you make, I disagree with this idea for several reasons in which I will elaborate on in this essay.
First and foremost, I believe success is related with many factors, and not just with money. One of the most important factor may be how much you have achieved in your life. Stated that, we can say that success is a subjective concept. We cannot compare two individuals that have reached the same position, but that they come from different backgrounds. For instace, let's suppose that two prestigious cardiologist want to compare their success. One cardiologist come from a low-income family, and the another comes from a well-known, wealthy family of doctors in which studing medicine has been a tradition, and one more step in life. Of course, we can say that despite both professionals are in the same job position, the one who has humble origins has had to surpass more obstacles in life than the second, and that his life has been more successful.
In addition, another important factor in which is based success is self-satisfaction. Without a doubt, everyone has different priorities in life. Some people is money-focused, so they will work assiduously in order to make as much money as they can. Others are more people-oriented, and they will be concerned in develop healthy relationships with their family and friends. And probably for the minority, their focus could be to obey the God commandments. Obviously, these three groups of people mentioned would deem their success based on what they consider important, and what makes them happy. For instance, a young engineer who wants to be rich and for that he creates a lucrative software company which, fortunately, generates high profit in its early years, there is no doubt that this person would consider himself successful. However, if your focus is not money, but being a good person: generous, kind, and a devout Catholic, you will not admire that engineer who thinks that he is successful, and his money will not be important at all for you. The center of your attention will be your relationship with God, and you will base your success according spiritual standars.
In summary, from my point of view, success is not related to money, but on what you have done in your life and how content you are with your actions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and you will base your success according spiritual standars. In summary, from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, for instance, in addition, in summary, no doubt, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94199535963 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77869908381 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517401392111 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.86738351254 750% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4895227641 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175938757465 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618545401774 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607743789297 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138029939329 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046720970279 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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