LOYALTY IS THE MOST IMPORTANT QUALITY IN CHOOSING A FRIEND
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether truthness should be considered while choosing a friend or not. As per Mr Karvin," Choosing a friend is more difficult than choosing a hostile Mate." It means that it is very difficult to check the loyalty of the person because most of the persons in the society having the characteristics of be-quile. Personally, I agree with this context. I feel this for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.
To begin with, It's very difficult for normal people to be normal with someone unless feeling safe. Feel safe means a situation where one feels more comfortable. Let us look at the instance of my personal experience. I saw two phase of my brother one at high school and second at college. In the first phase, he was fooled by all mates who he earlier thought was a good friend. Now fooled in what sense? fooled in sense of refused to give back the written notes to my brother. In the second phase, he chooses friends on the basis of Loyalty. Moreover, college friends helped a lot to my brother as in providing financial help, medical help, so on.
In addition, Most nations know the meaning of friend very-well. Indian Government thinks that Russia is the true friend of India. But on what parameters did India says that USSR(Now Russia) is the true friend? and the answer is loyalty parameter. Let us look at the metaphor of India- Pakistan confrontation 1971, where Russia gave broadcast news that if any third country helped Pakistan, then the third country will be USSR enemy. Such broadcast news gave hope to the Indian Government and result of such confrontation was going in the Indian side. This is the reason, every Indian feels that Russia is the true friend of India.
Finally, although it is not only the parameter to check the quality in choosing friend, However, it is one of the foremost parameters while choosing a friend. As per Dr Neon Diswan," friends are the brother of other Mother".
- TOEFL T P O 18 Integrated Writing Task extinction of the Torreya Taxifoha 52
- Young people enjoy life more than old people do 70
- The extended family is less important now than it was in the past. 66
- Professors are normally found in university classrooms, offices, and libraries doing researchand lecturing to their students. More and more, however, they also appear as guests ontelevision news programs, giving expert commentary on the latest events in t 71
- internet is good or bad 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...oosing a friend or not. As per Mr Karvin,' Choosing a friend is more difficult th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'phase' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'phases'.
Suggestion: phases
...ce of my personal experience. I saw two phase of my brother one at high school and se...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fooled
... good friend. Now fooled in what sense? fooled in sense of refused to give back the wr...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...that USSRNow Russia is the true friend? and the answer is loyalty parameter. Let us...
^^^
Line 8, column 81, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to friend'
Suggestion: to friend
...ameter to check the quality in choosing friend, However, it is one of the foremost par...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...choosing a friend. As per Dr Neon Diswan,' friends are the brother of other Mothe...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, third, well, while, i feel, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80289855072 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67815107373 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536231884058 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.356497689 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3181818182 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6818181818 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256032491788 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695760498261 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837371807507 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165787060203 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739464738513 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.