Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
In these times when third world countries are thriving hard to survive especially when hit by catastrophes to which, well developed countries have been providing financial help. However, there are those who believe that these countries should provide other means of help aside from money. As for me, I predominantly agree as this ensures that the right intervention have been taken to aid them.
It is explicably true that financial assistance have enabled the government to augment programs that are essential to the general public so as to sustain their day to day needs. This also entails the provision of emergency funding to those who are affected by natural disasters. With this, the people in the community, as the recipient of help, are assured that help has been delivered to them.
However, corruption is high among those underdeveloped countries. This is because the politicians behind the government mainly utilize such funds for their personal interest. In the Philippines, where the typhoon Yolanda has hit the eastern part of the country, tension had been high after the ill-fated incident as it took so long for government intervention to get to the victims and there had been inconsistencies with the data taken by the national government in terms of financial support from other nations.
Furthermore, political power is commonly seen when providing assistance to the less fortunate. This politicians think that they are able to buy each people in the community. Those which do not support the administration are less likely to receive the help they need. As a result, there is imbalance and unfair treatment among the members of the society which will most likely result in people being taken for nothing.
As a whole, money can help the government augment the programs intended for the people. However, I believe there are other ways major countries can do to provide as help as corruption and political power may be practiced.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ment programs that are essential to the general public so as to sustain their day to day needs...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hat are essential to the general public so as to sustain their day to day needs. This al...
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Line 13, column 96, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...iding assistance to the less fortunate. This politicians think that they are able t...
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Line 13, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s fortunate. This politicians think that they are able to buy each people in the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, may, so, third, well, as for, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17868338558 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78890473181 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520376175549 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3497388409 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.133333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153107235803 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516564678483 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658025303876 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903027015795 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082010563234 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.