Some people believe that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses as rates of obesity are getting higher and higher. To what extent do you agree?
Obesity plays a huge role in our current generation health problems. Some scientific data even suggest that obesity might be the number one risk factor for various life-threatening diseases like stroke,heart disease and high blood pressure. So it's our vital responsibility to maintain a healthy lifestyle that keeps obesity risks at bay.
Playing sports is an excellent activity to keep our body healthy. Nowadays there is a decline in interest among youth to play sport, Hence some people are rooting for the universities and school to make it as a mandatory activity to overcome or keep obesity in check.
I wholeheartedly agree to the call for making it mandatory in universities. Most of the students living in the city don't have enough space in their neighbourhood to indulge in any sort of sports or physical activity and there are other factors such as the time constraint due to their strict university schedule, lack of trainers that contribute to the lack of sports activities in the student's life.
Therefore, making sports a mandatory compulsory module in the student's schedule will give them a little push towards a better health style. In turn, this will bring good benefits to them such as improvement in mental health which will lead to good grades in their academics and ultimately keep them from becoming obese.
In conclusion, it should be one's own responsibility to maintain Obese free lifestyle. But making it mandatory will give them an incentive to push forward in terms of achieving the fore mentioned responsibility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18972332016 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94258621018 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616600790514 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9480739129 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.363636364 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150023584846 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583933357197 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413934309667 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0790630596031 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272172234424 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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