do you agree or disagree? young people today do not give enough time to help in their communities?
Since the end of last century, the concept of participating young people in helping their communities has been brought to the public attention. Some people believe that teenagers nowadays do not have enough time to involve in community services; however, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts in this belief. From a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight, given that children these days are overwhelmed with plenty of tasks, such as studying, working. Below I will strive my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, young people have been exposed to a fierce competition, so they should study hard to improve their grades. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, prestigious schools in California need high GPA to accept students. Provided that high schoolers students want to admit to these schools, they should work as hard as they can to improve their intelligible capacity and achieve their goals. To put it in another way, nowadays young people spend most of their time studying to earn fundamental knowledge, critical thinking and skills to get a lovely career in the future, thus they pull up future with a lot of thrives and prosperity. Consequently, teenagers do not have enough time to help their communities.
Next, coupled with studying, working is another reason why young people’s time is so tight. For instance, children in developed countries are under severe stress, given that they take loan from bank to apply for schools. Provided that they want to earn money for their tuition fees and all other collage related costs, they should work part time jobs in summer. Although involving in the practical life early could teach teenagers to take responsibilities, it could make them anxious and exhausted to do volunteer works for their communities.
Although the previous reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only reasons available. There is another subtle point that must be born in mind. The technological invention, such as the the internet attracts teenagers. Most of children who access the world web, have social media accounts either on Facebook, Instagram and Twitter. A recent survey that conducted by The University of Toronto found that young people nowadays communicate with their friends through the internet by chatting or by means of comments, likes or share more than communicate with people in their communities. Therefore, the internet invention has a negative impact on participating kids in communities’ activities.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, young people today do not have enough time to help their communities. It is suggested that schools design learning activities to encourage students to involve in volunteer work for their societies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 30.3222958057 214% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 1373.03311258 176% => OK
No of words: 461.0 270.72406181 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24295010846 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83104610783 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 145.348785872 177% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55748373102 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 419.366225166 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3008113253 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.095238095 110.228320801 104% => OK
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Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884696448309 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111545552455 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184779545556 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785119733677 0.0443174109184 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 63.6247240618 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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