Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone?s benefits. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
When thinking about the attitudes that students are supposed to have to their counterparts, most people probably fall somewhere between two extremes. On one side is the approach taken by most parents, who take great endeavor for their children to stand out among peers. On the other is the view expressed by some educators that students ought to learn to cooperate for everyone's benefits.
Granted, it is the widely accepted truth that teamwork plays an increasingly essential role in work and academic research. A team which involves colleagues from various kinds of background is gaining popularity in modern companies. As for academic research, there is a tendency that a group rather than a single person accounts for rising proportion of the
Nobel Prize winners.
Nevertheless, this does not mean that trying to excel others is harmful to students' development. For one thing, an excellent group generally consists of great members. Even if people were not aware of the fact that the worst soccer player is never admitted to the best soccer team, they can also draw from the experience that less smart people are more likely to be rejected by prominent firms.
For another, students tend to take free ride in a tear if schools lay too much emphasis on cooperation. After all, it is not impossible that a student in a team always do the easiest
part of the work, which is hard to avoid and is not helpful for their future work and study.
All in all, the advantages of pushing students to try and be better than others far outweigh the disadvantages.
- In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 78
- In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 89
- Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone?s benefits. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Part
...udent in a team always do the easiest part of the work, which is hard to avoid and...
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Line 21, column 51, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
..., the advantages of pushing students to try and be better than others far outweigh the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nevertheless, so, after all, as for, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96226415094 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64501115606 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630188679245 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1013640001 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.583333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283612914994 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929858202349 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990582350313 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121129932457 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105994924138 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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