The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city.Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar charts depicts comparative study for information on visits members to four different clubs in a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July.

Overall, the most notable point is that, the highest number of visitors noticed in the American Club in the month of June. However, Japanese Club was the only club which observed a least number of visitors in the month of January.

In the case of French Club, the number of visitors increased minimally in the first six month, which was around 60000 and reached at about 78000 in the last month in July. Similarly, period between January and July witnessed slight fluctuation among the number of visits in British Club, amounting to around 60000.

Japanese Club observed nearly 39000 visitors in January and that increased to about 47000 in April, while after that, the visits decreased and remained steady about 43000. Finally, the clear winner in terms of number of visitors was the American Club, with nearly 80000 visitors for the first four months, and then the numbers soared to nearly 97000 in June and settled at about 85000 in July.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July. Ove...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...e Club was the only club which observed a least number of visitors in the month o...
^
Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...rs increased minimally in the first six month, which was around 60000 and reached at ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, similarly, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.984375 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23979529036 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.0860649231 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.714285714 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119963010855 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617788263178 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294761760417 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080190065107 0.15604864568 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258132592504 0.0819641961636 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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