TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">Enjoying from jobs is one of the most critical concerns of the modern society, recently. Needless to say that every person whom enjoy more from his career would become effective employeer. Some people may find that working in less days but extra hours is infinitely preferable, whereas others would take the reverse. Even though, reducing days of the job has some benefit since it can reduce the global warming effect because of the fewer gass production in days. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that its not the best option. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
First reason that holds me this concept is that lose of a great opportunity for companies. It can be illustrated that every hours companies closed they finance will decrease. For exmple, when I was persuading my family bussiness at the bakery equipment company a few years ago, I realized that we must open even on the friday in order to improves our finance and decrease our production costs; hence, give better respond to our customers as better offer for enjoying our employer such a reant football place or give the more insurane options. After a while, I hire more worker to increase our work time since every seconds have undeniable impact on financ and finally I become to a new start-up of our city. Thus, it can be seen that this opportunity would not occur if our full days week would not happen.
Another reason is that people feel more tired if they have more weekend time. I read several articles about stuff which increase workers ability and responsibility. They analyze the various impacts of the work and conditions which effect; hence, they assume that some worker whom rest more at the free time could not abale to best respond in first day work. On of the articles estimates that approximately 30 percent the efficiency decrease after 8 hours worke, and people only prefer to go home and make rest. I can remeber my personal experience when I was studying in order to get admition from Sharif university; So, I study more than 10 hours every days. After a while, I disapointed from admition or even become engineer, while I considerably felt in love with engineering from my childhood. Therfore I decrease my study time and perfectly got admition on another university but I would happy and keen to be an engineer. Thus, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that 8 hours of worke is enough and extra hours could be harmful for health and love.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, people sould worke 5 days a week insteed of four. Not only because of its effect on company finance is undeniable, but also three days weekends would be harmful as worke more than 8 hours would be. Every person should take care of him health and know more about habite; so, can choice perfect option.</span><br>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...r. Some people may find that working in less days but extra hours is infinitely pref...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worker' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worker
...insurane options. After a while, I hire more worker to increase our work time since every s...
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Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... estimates that approximately 30 percent the efficiency decrease after 8 hours wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, thus, whereas, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8197702938 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9103120637 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.409090909 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4090909091 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1859568562 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528540558002 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381608633107 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120828618139 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210174059705 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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