You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone tolive with a family for six month and look after their six year old child.Explain why you would like the jobGive details of why you would be a suitable person to employSay how you would

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You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone tolive with a family for six month and look after their six year old child.

Explain why you would like the job

Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

Dear mr. and mrs. Smith,

I am writing with regards to your advertisement you are looking for a baby sitter in.

I am interested in this occasion. I am going to continue my education in your city next semester and I am free till that time. So, I hope this career make a profound contribution to my settlement. Hence, this occasion gives me the opportunity to become familiar with the new city, making a good connection and earn money. Although on this occasion I have to leave my family and home city sooner, it is well worth the effort.

Honestly, I hold that I am qualified enough for this job. Because not only have I passed some psychological courses at universities, but also I have taught toddlers missing their parents at nursery homes as a volunteer. Base on these experienced, I have achieved enough knowledge about children characters and can make a good connection with them.

some of my old friends live in Australia, and I have a plan to visit them in my free time in order that they help me to find an appropriate apartment, part-time job and arrange my registration process personally.

Please let me know if you need any further information. I look forward to receiving your response.

Kind regards

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... I am interested in this occasion. I am going to continue my education in yo...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... make a good connection with them. some of my old friends live in Australia, an...
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Line 17, column 110, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...them in my free time in order that they help me to find an appropriate apartment, part-time job...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, honestly, if, look, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1031.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81775700935 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87652028335 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654205607477 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1354725387 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9166666667 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 4.34317383033 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117966157227 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349720191498 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048387738386 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700344834043 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650800060875 0.0580467560999 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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