Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, human beings have always strived to improve their living standards and bring more convenience to their day-to-day. Today, it is axiomatic that, the young people usually elapse the longer part of their life following the celebrities. A plethora of people possess the conviction that the opinions of celebrities are very important for youth, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my view point.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, nowadays youth watch a lot of entertainment programs on TV, including sport games, music video and so on. In fact, they spend a lot of their time to watch these program. It should be stressed that today, using the internet give rise to sharing a lot of fun programs around country. Therefore, they are influenced by the celebrities. For example, the young people try to wear clothes similar to the famous people. In fact they want to behavior like the famous people. By and large, it is established beyond doubt that the opinion of celebrities is very important for youth and they less pay attention to the parents' views.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that from a psychological point, fun programs have much impact on the youth. Because, in this situation, the efficiency of brain much increases, so this issue has the positive effect on learning. The more elapse time, the more psychologists realize that learning with entertainment is very useful for youth. In addition, since the parents raise their children without any attractive program, they can not impose their mind of children. The noteworthy statistic, revealed by a psychological research conducted in my country, shows that the important key factor contributing to the influence on youth's mind is to raise with entertainment program. Consequently, there is solid bind between the imposing on mind and having fun program.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that nowadays since youth spend a lot of time with fun programs, they are affected more by the behaviors of celebrities. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this can not be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...this situation, the efficiency of brain much increases, so this issue has the positi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in addition, in brief, in fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15107913669 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88291493513 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532374100719 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8110166241 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178220879175 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552450613167 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457912739357 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108354474451 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185901116036 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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