The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The presented memo arguing for the need for new dormitories does not make a cogent case and has multiple assumptions that need clarification. The primary reason stated for building new dormitories is the increasing enrollment in Buckingham College. However, the presented argument assumes that the existing dormitories are being utilized at full capacity. If this is not the case, the new students can be accommodated in the extant dormitories itself, thereby eliminating the need for new dormitories.
Considering that the existing dormitories are not enough to accommodate the new students, one would need to construct new dormitories. The memo argues for building multiple new dormitories. Further, it is stated that the rate of enrollment is growing by approximately two percent every year. For making an informed choice, one needs to know how these two percent translate to the number of students. This is because two percent of 100 is only 20 students which might be accommodated by constructing new rooms in the existing dormitories. But two percent of 1000 is 200, which justifies the need for a new dormitory. In light of previous discussion, one needs to know the number of students enrolled to decide whether a new dormitory is needed. If yes, then how many dormitories are needed?
In the memo, it is argued that average rent for an apartment has increased which will make it difficult for students to find affordable housing. The rate of increase needs to be specified to support this argument. A mere 1 percent increase might not be a big deal but a 50% increase will surely make students worried about their housing.
At last, it is anticipated that new dormitories will likely results in more prospective students. While students might enjoy living in new dormitories, they might not consider dormitories an important criterion while selecting an educational institution. The stated argument requires to be justified by evidence, possibly a representative survey of students on what they consider important while selecting a college.
The arguments stated in the memo need more evidence like the number of new students, the utilization of existing dorms, the amount of increase in rent to make a persuasive case for increasing the number of dormitories in Buckingham College.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1884 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.106 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.971 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27371273713 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05467782537 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2499659744 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.421052632 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.73684210526 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209980473946 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821654320634 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544418399107 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131340632821 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572645464646 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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