Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Everyone has their own interests and ambitions. It is a very important factor to achieve a goal which satisfies our interests. Only then, we will be able to contribute cent percent to the job we take care off.It is not an easy task for achieving our dreams. We should be hardworking and determined and also should have the patience and courage to face all the ups and flaws happening in our life.
First thing we should take into concern is that, when we choose our dream we should be very aware of the possibilities on how much it is applicable for us or whether it can be achieved or not, or is it a healthy one which lead us to success. So we should choose a dream in which we should have the confidence in achieving it.
Second thing is that, there are chances of not being able to pursue our dreams due to several reasons or difficult conditions. In such cases it is more wise to pick worthy goals. Else we may end up in a very pathetic situation. We can also continue pursuing our goal after being stable.Some people may think that we should achieve our goal as early as possible. It is not necessary. We can also achieve our dreams later. There is not time span for achieving our goals.
Also following our selfish dreams is not a good thing. Our dreams should be healthy for us as well as for others, especially our family.Thus choose a dream which makes others feel proud of us. And also try hard to achieve your goals in all the possible ways and also do not be discouraged or depressed when we are not able to achieve our dreams. Strive hard , our dreams will become true.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ue pursuing our goal after being stable.Some people may think that we should achieve...
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...time span for achieving our goals. Also following our selfish dreams is not a g...
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...ll as for others, especially our family.Thus choose a dream which makes others feel ...
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... able to achieve our dreams. Strive hard , our dreams will become true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, well, as for, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 295.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41694915254 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42491095 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501694915254 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.526932675 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6470588235 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3529411765 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121824335807 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509348866475 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402685163548 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867843908068 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237743730396 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 12.1639044944 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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