"Allowing our children to spend hours a day IM’ing and employing social media is bound
to impede their social skills as they enter adulthood and the workforce."
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim made above. Use
relevant reasons and examples to support your point of view
The twenty-first century has been an era of revolution driven by technological advancement mainly in the digital part of the technology, one of the byproduct of this revolution is social media which has changed the way humans communicate. Though the claims have been social media has brought us closer then ever but all of this is not entirely true, in some cases it has brought us closer to people who are physically distant on the expense of neglecting people who are closer to us. This effects are clearly reflected not only in personal life but has also started penetrating the work life of an individual which has changed the way offices work and interact.
Gone are the golden days when one entered the office and was greeted by office mates on their way to office cabin, when one used to talk discuss about what in packed in tiffin for lunch and when one used to crack jokes in office and the laughter echoed across the floor, rather now people are disctracted in their mobile scrolling social media and sharing memes to their distinct friend and laughing by themselves. This has fostered a culture of individualism rather than collectivism which can have adverse effect in the office space. Offices are formed by teams where interaction in prevalent, ideas are exchanged this increases the social interaction not in a team but rather across teams. Increased social interaction will lead not only to faster problem solving but also increase lead to innovative ideas and solution as all the departments share the knowledge with an increased engagement of social media in office people will be secluded within the same team, this will limit the problem solving skills and also limit the innovation in a company.
The rise of social media has adverse effect on who people perceive their fellow work mates. During the twenty-first century a school child is being rewarded by their social circle in class on one is on social media. As the kid grows up the same culture is carried forward and gets inculcated in office culture where a fellow worker are judged by their social media account.
Thus an social media is threat in office spaces.
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- "Allowing our children to spend hours a day IM’ing and employing social media is boundto impede their social skills as they enter adulthood and the workforce."Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim made above. Userele 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'closer than'?
Suggestion: closer than
...s have been social media has brought us closer then ever but all of this is not entirely tr...
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Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...been social media has brought us closer then ever but all of this is not entirely tr...
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...y offices work and interact. Gone are the golden days when one entered the of...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...action in prevalent, ideas are exchanged this increases the social interaction no...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...y their social media account. Thus an social media is threat in office spaces...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89344262295 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51559233257 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478142076503 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.879092885 60.3974514979 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.818181818 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2727272727 23.4991977007 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160537368923 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722619503289 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359514286052 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112556497692 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309914530156 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.