Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author claims that the employment of the students from Omega University has been tampered by the suspicious increase in grade levels due to the existing evaluation procedure of the faculties by the students and the employment has decreased when compared with nearby Alpha University. To second this the author has provided with three claims without proper evidence which are weakening the strength of the argument than substantiating it.
To begin with, the author claims that, the introduction of the evaluation procedure has resulted in assigning higher grades to the students by the professors. The author has failed to cite the context in which the increase in grades is directly proportional to the appeasement of the student towards their professors. The professor could have graded their students purely based on their merit and not the necessity to give higher grades to please the student fraternity. Besides, the author has also cited that the average of the grades has increased by 30%. This again evokes required evidence based on which the claim is made. A higher bright student ratio, such as, could have been a significant factor for the increase in grade in addition to the changes in the system of education and the information technology for the last 15 years could have also attributed to the increase. Thus without proper facts that substantiate the above evidence, the claim doesn’t hold water.
Secondly, the author claims that the employers didn’t heed to the dramatic increase in the grades and thus the Omega graduates have failed to secure a job. Again, the author has failed to offer the necessary evidence to hold the hypothesis true. Maybe there existed a case where the student’s major background or the specialization did not meet with the requirements of the employer. Also, The Omega University due to this name could have highly focused more on the academic front that weakened the graduate's other potential weighing points for employment and thus making the employers consider these significant factors that didn’t make the Omega graduates, a healthy choice.
Finally, the author also claimed that the nearby Alpha University graduates were more successful in terms of securing a Job comparing to the Omega graduates. This claim could be fundamentally questioned on the grounds on which the recruitment happened. Maybe the Alpha university had ties with the Organisation which conducted campus drives for placements. Or perhaps, the employers were the Alumni of the Alpha University and that could have had an effective influence on the recruitment.
Thus the author though had a variety of claims that made the students of Omega University a poor choice to the employers, the author failed to prove the same with the stated evidence above. Thus the argument fails to acumen the facts with claims and it is specious at worst.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2360 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 884, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...d have also attributed to the increase. Thus without proper facts that substantiate ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...fective influence on the recruitment. Thus the author though had a variety of clai...
^^^^
Line 9, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...he same with the stated evidence above. Thus the argument fails to acumen the facts ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21459227468 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77693431334 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448497854077 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8213825396 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.894736842 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5263157895 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210513365904 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704244285367 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731504474529 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116879926108 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620263297791 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.