The maps below show the centre of a small town called slip as it is now, and plans for it's development.Summer is the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below show the centre of a small town called slip as it is now, and plans for it's development.

Summer is the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Anmol jjj on Thu, 10/03/2019 - 10:10

The two maps of the center of the towns of Islip give information about the city currently and in the future. Overall, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development.

First of all, according to the current map, the centre is close to a countryside. The main road deserves houses, a school several shops and park.

Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the city, a lot of changes can be observed the size of the centre will increase in an oval shape; the countryside will disappear. Moreover, the single road will be replaced by a bigger dual carriageway. A pedestrian way will deserve the centre area. New houses will be built with new facilities such as a bus station and parking. The shops will be grouped in a shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be similar. As the city will have more people the school will be bigger.

To sum up, between the actual map of Islip town centre and the future planned development, a lot of modifications are predicted. On the one hand, the city will be bigger with more facilities. On the other hand, the park will be reduced and the countryside will disappear. The city will have changed a great deal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e centre will increase in an oval shape; the countryside will disappear. Moreover...
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Line 9, column 504, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the garden area which will be similar. As the city will have more people the scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 1.00243902439 1496% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1017.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6866359447 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66613658928 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520737327189 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.33902439024 346% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1091918721 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4666666667 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0803710372765 0.215688989381 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344186081176 0.103423049105 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475958430056 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.072514762839 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029847882723 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 13.2329268293 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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