In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
It is true that more people are gaining more weight and their health has been deteriorating as a result. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem.
In my opinion, two main factors are to blame for the weight gain in the last couple of decades. Firstly, people’s lifestyle is shifting from active to sedentary. One reason for this is the technology advancement which brought convenience and leisure to our homes and workplaces. For example, we are more homebound than ever because of the advent of internet. Without leaving the comfort of home, we can order food on UBER EAT and go on playing video games or binging on a Netflix show. Also, when we do leave the house, a cubicle is usually where most people spend 8 hours sitting in front of another screen. Secondly, the processed-food industry is another culprit. Food that has been highly processed such as chips, PopTarts, Twinkies, Skittles, Cheetos just to name a few, are compounded with sugar, fat, and salt which induces cardiovascular disease. Nevertheless, people willingly shove that heart-attack into their mouthes because those food are made irresistible by food scientists.
Weight and health can definitely be managed. I believe that change must start with the government’s food regulation. To begin with, not only artificial additives that have been proven to cause health problems need to be banned but also those ones appear to harmless but make food taste better need to be restricted. In addition, it should be mandatory for high-calories junk food manufacturers to put a warning on the packages, just as tobacco manufacturers are demanded by law to print “ Smoking causes cancers” on the boxes. Last but not least, the government should definitely campaign for a more active lifestyle. For instance, subsiding the gyms to give out lower membership fees; advertising the benefits of exercising in schools, hospitals and public transportation.
In conclusion, people will continue to face weight and health problems unless the government, food industry, and people’s lifestyle choices start to change.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 944, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'those foods'?
Suggestion: this food; those foods
...heart-attack into their mouthes because those food are made irresistible by food scientist...
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Line 9, column 242, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'those' instead.
Suggestion: those
...lth problems need to be banned but also those ones appear to harmless but make food taste ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27089337176 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01263165226 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616714697406 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0438328669 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.611111111 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132852155643 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432655046416 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489885514054 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105092472435 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407330075093 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.