These days young children spend a lot of time using computers tablets and smart phones . Some people think that introducing children to technology at a young age is beneficial .others believe that they would benefit more from playing traditional games.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, it considers that lots of time is taken to use computers tablets and smart phones by the youth, bringing about distinct debates between people. Some hold the positive attitude towards it, leading children to new technology in their early age. Others argue that traditional games are better compared to the new. I will discuss both ideas and my own view as follows.
A number of individuals think the young have a knowledge of technology is beneficial. Broadening their horizons, it helps to learn more about the world via various approaches such as Internet news, videos and movies, which show a more complex and wide-ranged world and shorten the distance from the truth to them. Additionally, they also develop their skills of identifying overflowing information, with the technology changing rapidly and dramatically. At the same time, they will keep energetic when using computers tablets and smart phones, prompting to construct a vigorous and novel knowledge structure. More importantly,children's cognitive abilities are also improved through distinguishing floods of information, or they can also embrace different cultures or ideas more easily and form their own unique thoughts towards the consistently changing world.
On the contrary, it is considered that traditional games are superior. Most of these games are outdoor activities, benefiting to children's physical and mental health with doing exercise and intelligence edifying ways compared to the new, which is in absence of physical exercise. Besides, the traditional form a more sociable atmosphere while the new shaped a cold environment for the young. And the traditional result in closer distance from the nature to children. In the period of the tradition, children could get knowledge that the new can't give, such as the touch sense of animals or plants.
As fas as I am concerned, introducing new technology to children may benefit more, arousing their curiosity and thirst for knowledge and improving their cognitive abilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, may, so, while, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47284345048 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01858269737 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597444089457 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6249015839 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.2 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308850203528 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919627456828 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493371505524 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1705561874 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325268173333 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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