Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, one way to fill the leisure time is watching television that affects people’s life and behavior. While some believe that the positive effects of television are more than negative ones, I believe that television has more negative impacts that involve the youth especially. In the ensuing paragraphs, the reasons substantiating my standpoint are elaborated.
To begin with, it is significant to be mentioned that in this sophisticated world, television has influenced people’s lifestyles. To be more specific, people and especially the youth spend a great deal of their daily time on watching television. On the other hand, despite the censors that are exerted to the television programs, there are some programs that have violence content, which are one of the most favorable programs that young people prefer to watch. Thus, being not aware of these negative effects on their behavior, young people watch these programs on television. An example can derive this fact home. My 18-year-old son was accustomed to watch television series with the content of violence last month. He got involved in the first character of the movie and tried to imitate his behavior and my son’s treatment got worse day by day. Thus, I prohibited him to watch this serial and decided to filter the movies he saw and reduce the amount of time he spent watching television. Had he watched this type of program more, his behavior would have been aggravated.
Furthermore, currently, television programs cause some young families to collapse. To be more specific, some television programs usually seen by young families, increase luxury trends leading to elevating the level of expectation. Additionally, there are several programs that propagate disloyalty between couples and meanwhile, young couples are more vulnerable and are supposed to be more affected. As a case in point, an in-depth study conducted in some developing countries demonstrates that in 2012, 38% of young couples in Uganda, who watched television in their free time got divorced. However, 78% of the young couples spending their free time going out or doing other kinds of activities such as solving crosswords have a prosperous married life. Therefore, the more young couples watch television, the worse their behavior is, the higher the rate of the divorce is.
To sum up, taking all the reasons and points mentioned above into account, one could conclude that the negative effects of television on the youth’s behavior are more than positive ones. It is because not only do the youth learn violence in television programs, but also television affects the marital life of young couples negatively.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 645, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to watching'.
Suggestion: accustomed to watching
... this fact home. My 18-year-old son was accustomed to watch television series with the content of v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28438228438 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83246039142 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.851604404 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.35 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238524449374 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772898634771 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525119213841 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17231178612 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470512206005 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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