A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Conclusion of the argument in the given excerpt is not well supported by evidence mentioned in it. There is lacune in this derived conclusion. One can not conclude just by giving one or two points about something. There should be critical analysis to reach the final result
At first, the statement given is not well supported by the data. Statistical information supports the statement, here is it mentioned that on an average childern in US visits dentist, but it not bolstered by other information like, for how many children are there in the test group, or data is collected from which area. As it is well understood that our society has certain economical levels, people who are well to do can afford a dentist visit but on the other hand who are just survining on hand to mouth basis, not able to afford the dental care. Hence, this piece of information lacks such type of basic and relvant specifications. Also, the author did not mention any details about the data collected from suburban areas of Himalaya region, like for how many participants were there or whether data is collected from children of well to do families or from slum areas, where people are extremely poor.
Secondly, in city life, children are prone to eat artificial sugar food items, like candies, ice-creams, cakes and a few others. So it might be a possibility that after having such sugary food items they do not pay enough attention to clean their teeth. Though it seems a very basic task but it plays an important role in the maintenance of oral hygiene. May be children are not paying much attention to such habits and parents are also reluctant on this part. Also, people living in suburban areas are very conscious for their diets, as they include different vegetables and fruits in it. Also, they have an ample amount of time to prepare delicious dishes. whereas, in the U.S people are living on the edge of the cloak. They skip their meals and are less contious about themselves and their food.
Thirdly, it is scientifically proven that natural resources play important role in the health of localities. For example, usually water content in Himalaya region may consist of certain natural compound or element which provides the strength to their teeth and gums. By unknowingly, people living in that area are maintaining a good oral health just be mere drinking the water. SImilarity, in the U.S from the area from where we took a sample for our study may not contain some content in water which affecting their oral health. Natural resources contain such contents are difficult to supplant from artificial ones. One best example for this, is the bottled water we are consuming on a regular basis, lacks certain micronutrients. Though, they seem insubstituent but play a vital role in our normal body functioning. But due to lack of these contents, we face critical consequences in near future.
Finally, the conclusion so provided by the author in the excerpt could be analyzed once again with consideration of the above mentioned arguments
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 518 350
No. of Characters: 2458 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.771 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.745 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.72 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.72 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.243 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.46 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 660, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...nt of time to prepare delicious dishes. whereas, in the U.S people are living on the ed...
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Line 9, column 660, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt of time to prepare delicious dishes. whereas, in the U.S people are living on the ed...
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Line 9, column 678, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...are delicious dishes. whereas, in the U.S people are living on the edge of the cl...
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Line 13, column 400, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...rinking the water. SImilarity, in the U.S from the area from where we took a samp...
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Line 13, column 623, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...t to supplant from artificial ones. One best example for this, is the bottled water we are c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, whereas, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2540.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 516.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92248062016 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6443960007 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513565891473 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1596866088 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.64 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102572768082 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272958501272 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037811580304 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437795832303 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387807073556 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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