TPO13: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
family is one of the major bases in any individual life, it is the core of society and has an important rule in happiness. there are two types of family; extended and simple, each has a conflict in individual and society. personally, I believe an extended family is more important and essential nowadays, this is because it provides more support for members financialy and emotionaly , and because it strengthens the integrity of society.
First of all, when you have a great family and connects to them perfectly they will care for you a give all support you need. so when you have a bad day or you suffer from stress you can release all these feeling by going to any member and talk to him, they will be available every time and at every situation, if you can not find one they others are in standby for you. this is emotionaly. However, financially if you get stuck in condition requires a lot of money and you can not afford it, you can ask for help and they will collect enough money to support you. my personal expirience is a compelling example for this, when I finished high school i need money to complete my journey and attend to university to study medicine, i asked my grandparent and he talked to my big family to collect enough money for that.
Secondly, to gain a strong society big families with there strong relationships are the key, furthermore, increasing number of members in society increase the variability of the culture that makes living in this community like a heaven, in addition, the country will gain benefits economicaly by using them in many occupations they nedd to achieve the development every government need. For instant, in jordan which is my country, it is composed of many extended family and this help in build a strong relationships and exchanging of thoughts,ideas,art,food that eventualy lead to contribute to the culture we hold and enjoy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Family
family is one of the major bases in any indivi...
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...and has an important rule in happiness. there are two types of family; extended and s...
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...s a conflict in individual and society. personally, I believe an extended family is more i...
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...rt for members financialy and emotionaly , and because it strengthens the integrit...
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...re for you a give all support you need. so when you have a bad day or you suffer f...
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...one they others are in standby for you. this is emotionaly. However, financially if ...
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... lot of money and you can not afford it, you can ask for help and they will colle...
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...relationships and exchanging of thoughts,ideas,art,food that eventualy lead to contrib...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83841463415 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88578414182 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52743902439 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.4825625433 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.7 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0668284589347 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349420275366 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321580536494 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0612456327048 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446606308495 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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