TPO 26:Agree/Disagree:It's better for children choose jobs that are similar to their parent' jobs than to choose job that are very different from their parents' jobs.
It goes without saying that in today's world finding a good job which you are intersted in and you can succeed in that is very important. While some people believe that the youngsters should follow their parents and work in the same field, the other hold the view that it is better for every individual to follow their dream and find a job which is appropriate for themselves. Personally, I am of the later group's viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my perspective are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is not a true fact that if one's parents are successful in an occupation, it is necessary leads their children prosperity in exact same field. To elaborate, although some abilities can improve by practicing, every body has distinct instinctive featurs. So, one may have different instintct abilities and if they follow their parents, it does not lead to their prosperity. For example, my father is a teacher and he encourages me to follow him. However, I do not like to work as a teacher because I have a good mental ability and my favorite field is computer engineering. As a result, I refused his suggestion and started to tracking my dreaming as a computer engineer. Now, I am a successful computer engineer and work in a big technological company.
Moreover, nowadays, due to the improvements in science and technology some new job have been created which did not exist in the past. Besides, every body have his individual hobbies favors. So, one's children may be intersted in the field that have been created recently. therefore, it is the parents duty to prepare a situation for their children to resulted in the prosperity of their children and not force their children to necessarily following their jobs. For example, One of my parents have intersted in the biomedical engineering while his father was a carpenter. He decided to study his favorite major and now he is studying Phd in his field.
As shown above, considering all the points and reasons mentioned above, it is safe to say that the best decision for the children is letting the to find their interest and finally work in that respect. It is because every body has distinct instictive abilities and there are some new fields taday which does not exist in the past and choosing them may be resulted in the prosperity oof the children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...gin with, it is not a true fact that if ones parents are successful in an occupation...
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Line 9, column 195, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...have his individual hobbies favors. So, ones children may be intersted in the field ...
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Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... field that have been created recently. therefore, it is the parents duty to prepare a si...
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Line 9, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... created recently. therefore, it is the parents duty to prepare a situation for their c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85037406484 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80666641845 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468827930175 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3282840105 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.368421053 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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