The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.
One option is direct removal of salt from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. Water from the lake would be pumped into the facilities and heated. This would cause the water to evaporate into steam, while salt and other materials dissolved in the water would be left behind. The steam would then be cooled down and returned to the lake as salt-free water. Gradually, the high salt levels would be reduced and the lake’s overall health would be restored.
Another possible solution is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. Since water in the Pacific Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. The ocean water could be delivered through pipelines or canals.
Yet another solution would be to control the lake's salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In the smaller sections, salinity would be allowed to increase. However, in the main and largest section, salinity would be reduced and controlled by, among other things, directing all the freshwater from small rivers in the area to flow into that main section of the lake.
Both reading and speaking focus on the solution of reducing salinity, but express opposing viewpoints. Whereas the author provide three options to solve this problem, the professor disagree with the authors' solutions for the following reasons.
To begin with, according to the text, the author mentions that one solution is to pump the water from lake into the facilities. On the other hand, the speaker states that salt and other materials dissolved that left behind can damage to people and animal in that area. This is because the solid materials that left behind is toxic chemical.
In addition, based on the text, another way to solve this problem is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. On the contrary, the professor said that the ocean is 100 kilometers far away from the lake. The government have to spend a plenty of money.
Lastly, the writer says that another options is to construct walls to divide the lake. In contrast, the speaker states that California is located in the region that usually have earthquake. In short term, this solution might be work but the wall would be damaged from disaster in the future. As the result, the water will mix back to the main section.
- TPO3 - Integrated Writing 3
- TPO-3 Integrated writing 3
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 60
- In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. 60
- It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us on the solution of reducing salinity, but express opposing viewpoints. Whereas...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or said that the ocean is 100 kilometers far away from the lake. The government h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... work but the wall would be damaged from disaster in the future. As the result, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, lastly, so, whereas, in addition, in contrast, in short, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 210.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85238095238 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31307532526 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552380952381 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6446547552 49.2860985944 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9166666667 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159001457515 0.272083759551 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542578412634 0.0996497079465 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481259651955 0.0662205650399 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924451837471 0.162205337803 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495192666811 0.0443174109184 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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