tpo 37
One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest that this problem can be solved through an invention called a turtle excluder device (TED) that is incorporated into the nets. A TED provides a passage through which the turtles can escape. However, TEDs have been criticized for several reasons.
The article and the reading are both about possibility of existence of bees 200 million years ago. The author starts the passage by asking a question. The article mentions that there are some skeptics which claim that there weren't any bees 200 million years ago. Although, the speaker states some extinct reasons which support the claim pointing out that bees exist that time.
First of all, the author says that earlier fossils preserving bees that date to 100 million years ago so the fossils, which are resemble bee nests found in United State, can't belong to this group of insects. The lecturer agrees that with the first part of claim asserting by the author. she opposes other parts of the claim,though. she states that because there was rarly trees which fossils could preserve there, no bees fossil generated.
Furthermore, the speaker believes that it is possible that bees have fed nonflowering plants until flowering plants evolutionary, and that's how the lecturer contradicts the second argument mentioned by the author.
Finally, according to the lecture, there are some chemical evidence which support the speaker. she points out an chamical analysis which illustrates that there are some material in the fossil structure which are in chambers of modern bee nets, therefore it enhances the possibility of existence of bees 200 million years ago.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tarts the passage by asking a question. The article mentions that there are some sk...
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Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...re some skeptics which claim that there werent any bees 200 million years ago. Althoug...
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Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... werent any bees 200 million years ago. Although, the speaker states some extinct reason...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'resembled'.
Suggestion: resembled
...ion years ago so the fossils, which are resemble bee nests found in United State, cant b...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...semble bee nests found in United State, cant belong to this group of insects. The le...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
... part of claim asserting by the author. she opposes other parts of the claim,though...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , though
...or. she opposes other parts of the claim,though. she states that because there was rarl...
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Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...pposes other parts of the claim,though. she states that because there was rarly tre...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bees'' or 'bee's'?
Suggestion: bees'; bee's
... which fossils could preserve there, no bees fossil generated. Furthermore, the sp...
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Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ntil flowering plants evolutionary, and thats how the lecturer contradicts the second...
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Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...cal evidence which support the speaker. she points out an chamical analysis which i...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ich support the speaker. she points out an chamical analysis which illustrates tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, second, so, therefore, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 221.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18099547511 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44639506112 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552036199095 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 419.366225166 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8036079077 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.090909091 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0220106027235 0.272083759551 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0101118598182 0.0996497079465 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0135602898869 0.0662205650399 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0155556088348 0.162205337803 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169216954434 0.0443174109184 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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