do you agree or disagree? people today live longer than they were in the past
Since the beginning of the current century, people have become healthier than they were in the past. To put it in other word, nowadays, people can take care of their health, so they can live longer than ever before. From my perspective, the main reasons of this phenomenon are the advancements in the technology and people are more aware of healthy behaviors. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more details.
The first and foremost point, in the past, life was very simple, and technology was primitive. Thus, many cures and vaccines did not exist. On the other hand, in the last two decades, the technological innovations have improved dramatically, which give researchers chance to make many medicinal advancements that seem impossible to past generations. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, in 1960, with technology scientists invented the first artificial heart, and surgeons attempted the first live transplantation. Moreover, these medical improvements saved many people’s lives, and the death rate has declined drastically. In addition to that, the US government use technology to amplify its heath care system; hence, Americans can easily access the care. Provided that they follow up with their primer doctors and do annual checks, they can discover any disease early, which increase the chance of recovery. Consequently, technology plays an essential role in lengthen people’ lifespan.
Next, coupled with medical technological advances, awareness of healthy attitudes is another conspicuous reason why people live longer than ever before. To be more elucidate, this days, people are more educated and have a broad knowledge about the healthy behaviors. For instance, People in the developed countries, such as Canada and the United State of America are accustomed to playing exercise, which reduce the risk of many disease, such as heart strokes and diabetes. Furthermore, in markets, there are availability of various organic fruits and vegetables, which have been cultivated without pesticides or chemicals. People in the American and Canadian society are aware that pesticides are harmful, so they opt for eating organic food. Likewise, the less exposed to these devastating materials, the less prone to many diseases, such as cancer. As A result, having idea about the healthy eating habits improves people’s health significantly.
Taking everything into consideration, without a a doubt, people nowadays live more time, not only because of the technology advancements, but also better eating practices. It is suggested that governments put more fuds to educate communities about healthy behaviors through ongoing advertisements and programs.
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, likewise, moreover, so, then, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51895734597 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97997347443 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601895734597 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4396915588 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.904761905 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207082688561 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581489065931 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683699652696 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13005193613 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728281185216 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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