Now children do not behavior as well as the children did in the past. Which one of the
following measure do you think can help children (age 5~10) behave better?
A. Control the time they spend on TV or movie.
B. Take more time to chat with children.
C. Monitor the interaction between children and their peers.
Now children do not behavior as well as the children did in the past. which one of the following measure do you think can help children (age 5~10) behave better? A. Control the time they spend on tv or movie. B. take more time to chat with children. C. Monitor the interaction between children and their peers.
children are the significant part of a society, and it is important how they behave. There is a controversy that how we can help kids to behave as well as they can. some people believe that it is the best to talk to children and have a great bond with them. others are in the opinion that we should campare them to other children, which I wonder is the worst procedure that parents can pursue. I, personally speaking, feel that parents should manage their children' time spending on tv or films. In what follows, the reasons to support my viewpoint and perceptive are vindicated.
To begin with, a lot of variable programs are showed on tv, which just some of them are proper for children even when some of cartoons are showed. aggression, sadness are the main background of some program. when children watch these kind of cartoons, they gradually tend to behave like the charectors of shows. As time goes on, they look as if they become angry and aggressive. In spite of showing proper and good programs on tv, parents should restrict their children' time spending on tv. children will watch their cartoons so long as their parents allow them. To put it into a more vivid picture, my longer brother, Mohamadhossein, used to watch a particular cartoon named Ninja when he was six years old. he was quite aggressive while he was watching the cartoon. Once, my mother told him he can't watch this program any more. Despite of his objections, his behaviors finally changed in good way.
Furthermore, rest time is a significant part of kids' life in 5-10 year old children. when they sleep enough, their brain system works very well. we all have experienced that without enough rest we were angry and bored. it is more sever in children. I've read an article, which mentioned that when children don't sleep enough, they would behave like they are mad of us or something like that. it shows parents to handle their rest time by reducing their time spending on movies or something. Back to my example, my brother always got angry when woke him up to have lunch because he stayed up late to watch his favorite cartoon.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, in my book declining the tv time is the best approach, which parents can utilize to train their kids as well as possible. I feel in this way because of evil programs and rest time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, look, so, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66455696203 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46338079464 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514767932489 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4322201721 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96666666667 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477467241859 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143982964247 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145092552183 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331925362544 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.274549789073 0.0645574589148 425% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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