The extended family( grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than in the past.
There have been several disputed discussion on whether grandparents, cousins plays an essential role in our life or not. As for everything, there are always sides to every question. Personally, I believe that predecessors, cousins play a key role in making the solidarity of the family. I feel this for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, Grandparents, by his experienced, provided the knowledge about how to become the successful person in any field; moreover, they explained the different ways related to how to tackle and what should be the response in the case of difficult situations?. Here a problematic situation may be related to internal affairs or external affairs. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, when I was ten years old, my parents have died in the motor crash. However, My extended helped me a lot in the said situation and provided me with a path which gave me success.
Secondly, Extended family helps other blood members in case of financial crises. Furthermore, they also help in a situation where you are not able to think .i.e. what is right? And what is wrong?. For better understanding, let us look at the metaphor of My brother. About ten months back, he went to financial crises, and the reason for such financial crises is loss in his business which results in negative networth. His balance sheet showed that he owe about 50 million to trade creditors; my parents did not have the savings or investment to set-off such colossal borrowing. In that difficult situation, My uncle helped to set-off such enormous loan. Therefore, One should maintain a relationship with his blood members.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that family members place a significant role in our life. This is because life is a wheel, one time you will taste success, and on other time you will taste failure and family members helps when your life is in danger position
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...ituation where you are not able to think .i.e. what is right? And what is wrong?. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92192192192 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77834423248 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576576576577 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9253380976 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2631578947 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0615897049675 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0177811797999 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279366736326 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0347546956639 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00871848098067 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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