Some people say that art subjects such as painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US">It is sometimes argued that whether high
school students should be forced to take art courses or not. I completely agree
with that they should learn art.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US">There are several reasons why those who
oppose the idea would argue that students should not take art courses. Firstly,
taking art courses are wasting students' valuable time. E.g. students can use
that time to do some English exercises or some of them do not consider
themselves have talents in art. Secondly, it costs an amount of money of art
that would be a burden of parts of students from poverty background because of
needing to buy new art tools for courses. Finally, scores of art would not
affect the exam for applying to colleges for most students that makes them deem
art is useless and do not need care about art, and results in certain students
feel bored when taking art courses.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US">On the other hand, I would agree that
taking art courses are necessary for them. Art subjects like sketching, sculpture
and film appreciation could broaden pupils' horizon and arouse their
creativity. For example, when I was in the high school, I learned from the film
appreciation course about using different angles to analyze the meaning of
films, which was I never done before. Since then, I have started observing this
world in detailed, which made I have found that there is so much beauty in
everywhere and become a method of releasing my pressure from other subjects
such as mathematics. Moreover, it cultivated my patience and attention that
enhanced in both painting and sculpture courses at the same time.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US">In conclusion, I do believe that those
students would be beneficial to taking art subjects than not taking them.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
e.g., finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09797297297 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.3422824038 2.80592935109 190% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.7439112047 49.4020404114 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.5 106.682146367 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182485923843 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085860569288 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291771590778 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618554782907 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510280191442 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.1 13.0946893788 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.69 12.4159519038 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.