The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the comparison between early mobile phone and modern mobile phone.
Overall, it can be seen that the contemporary mobile has a lot of features added along with flexibility than the previous one.
First of all, the display of modern mobile phone is full-coloured, compared with black or white display of old mobile phone, however both phones have own ear phone. The weight of early phones is more than double, compared with the weight of modern mobile phone., but length and width of the modern phone are smaller with 9 centimeters and 4 centimeters, while early phone had 13 centimeters and 5 centimeters respectively.
Following that, early phone has only keyboard and function with select button, while contemporary phone has extra functions such as e-mail, in order to send and receive messages on the Internet, it can play music and multi-player games facility,although it can also be closed and opened.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , although
...ay music and multi-player games facility,although it can also be closed and opened.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, while, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12987012987 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85850026787 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62987012987 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4375593184 43.030603864 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.0 112.824112599 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 5.23603664747 225% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186097859156 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12000083635 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643106137368 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147239065474 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688656696654 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.2329268293 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 61.2550243902 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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