More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Undoubtedly , there is an escalating count of obesity among children in eminent nations and it is one of severe hassles which they are combating. Widespread culture of junk food in rich nations has allured the hefty numbers of young people and turned them obese as well as prone to deadly diseases.
Since the hectic lifestyle has made people so busy that they do not have sufficient time to cook food, thus children are migrating towards preprocessed food. Seemingly, the canned food contains high carbohydrates, sugar, preservatives and emulsifier which intensify the level of blood sugar and allow the unwanted fat to accumulate in the body. Also it is biased to overlook the fact that published by WHO that in the U.S.A owing to spurt in the intakes of burgers, pizzas and aerated beverages, the teenagers are becoming fatty day by day. Therefore, consuming high amount of fast food is one of the prominent causes among young people for increasing up their weight.
To continue, obesity has endless chronic repercussions on young ones which which eventually gives birth to myriads of fatal ailments. Over weight always make the body in inactive and welcomes innumerable ailments which adversely effect the performance and capability. To exemplify, as per the survey carried out by British Medical Association, in the gone calendar year, the major portion of young populace in London is suffering with cardiovascular diseases and type two diabetes. Hence, the excess weight
is shifting the youngsters towards the epoch of ailments which are incurable and fatal by nature.
In conclusion, proliferation in the consumption of junk food are one of leading factors for over weight which is bringing the youngster close to countless diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24555160142 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82246337123 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619217081851 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.307637027 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 134.0 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0453315974036 0.244688304435 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0178041162867 0.084324248473 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0180132013746 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0229316486241 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160519947477 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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