TPO 37 independent- agree or not. because people are busy doing so many different thins, they do very few things very well.
Working effectively and efficiently is the optimum goal to which all the workers want to achieve even for the most expensive approaches. In this context, there are mutually exclusive notions regarding whether people are doing things correctly at their best way or not. From my point of view, I am inclined to the idea that individuals are not finishing their tasks in an acceptable rate in spite of the fact that there are many others opposing this belief. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that workers nowadays cannot concentrate on what they are doing, mainly because modern life style has enforced them to do so. To put it into a more vivid picture, as the expenses of living have been increasing exponentially, workers have to have at least two jobs and work for at least two shifts per day to earn enough money. For example, my brother Ali, is married and has two kids. Although he has a master's degree in engineering and is a renowned civil engineer in our city, Kerman, he has to work in the evening as a taxi driver to pay his loans. Providing that he does not work for at least 70 hours per week, he cannot earn enough money to pay his house rent, and his landloard, who is so mean, will inevitably ask him to leave. As a result, he not only has to leave some parts of his engineering tasks behind but also does not have enough time to finish his tasks completely; therefore, there are myriad complaints about his workstyle in the organization he is working in.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that today's workers especially knowledge workers want to become professionals in almost everything. They are prone to this notion because of their governments to whom they have taught that working hard is the climax of all human beings. The best example of this notion is the people of China; comunism has made them industrious workers whose goal is only to serve their country. However, this belief has made most of them reluctant to the main objective of each task: its result. They just want to work as hard as they can ragardless of what their outcomes will be. As an illustration, researchers of Beijing university, the biggest knowledge institute of China, have conducted a survey of China's factories and realized that virtually 35% of their products have malfunctions due to the inefficient workstyle of their workers. These scholars concluded that their notion of working is the main cause of this devastating problem and warned the government that if they do not try to change their core belief about working, they will have lost 20% of their international market share by the end of 2050.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I believe that people have become more careless since they are doing diverse activities although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, the workers not only have to work for many hours to cover their expenses but also the way they have been educated with has forced them to belive that they have to work as hard as they can and know as much as they are capable of; thus, they always cannot finish their tasks efficiently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, as for, as to, at least, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2809.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78534923339 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66709301066 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492333901193 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9460462204 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.842105263 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8947368421 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104451431093 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036721040682 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436803025542 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727992701382 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266820318835 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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